Haiku – Luca’s Lily Pad

 

blustery wind
kicking a leaf
into winter

 
Commentary by Luca Cenisi: Another great piece of work, where the unmarked cut at the end of line 1 gives continuity to a reading that favors a dynamic and fragile vision of reality, according to the aesthetic rule of shiori しをり. The exasperation of the movement, rendered through the use of terms such as ‘blustering’ and ‘kicking’, is partly mitigated by the (generally) soft and quiet image of winter in line 3, while the alliteration of the sound ‘i’ through the whole poem enhances a sense of clearness (kido 輝度) and adaptation.

 

My Haiku Pond – Luca’s Lily Pad: a weekly column – by Luca Cenisi
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1NCUecVsUOm2GwhgImvOOCYDWcrNht-vS/view

 

Archive: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1k_A1Kp3CpPw5gV3QJGG0m72ZoQkt1od5vktAi2ri7Kc/edit?fbclid=IwAR2MFOQ0BZDAC1xydFc42xnPOP3nQfnKG6sOhR9hjAXm5kBYnLzTe2HRqkA

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About marthamagenta

Martha Magenta lives in Bristol, England, UK. Her haiku, haibun, senryu, and tanka have appeared in a number of journals, magazines, and anthologies. She was awarded Honourable Mentions for her haiku in The Fifth Annual Peggy Willis Lyles Haiku Awards, 2017, and the 71st Basho Memorial English Haiku Contest, 2017, and for her tanka in UHTS “Fleeting Words” Tanka Contest 2017. She is listed on The European Top 100 haiku authors, 2017. https://marthamagenta.com/
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