Haiku – Harusame


brisk breeze—
a seagull’s wings
sweep the mist

Commentary: a sense of movement (ugoki 動き) that links the two part of the poem, thanks also to the alliteration of the ‘s’ sound in the second ku 句. The cut (kire 切れ) at the end of line 1 creates a pause (ma 間) in the escalating process of the scene, moving from a lively and light vision (okashimi おかしみ) of the world (the ‘brisk breeze’) to a deeper one (cf. the ‘mist’ or kiri 霧), aligning with the aesthetic values of sabi 寂 and yūgen 幽玄.

Harusame 6 February 2019



About marthamagenta

Martha Magenta lives in Bristol, England, UK. Her haiku, haibun, senryu, and tanka have appeared in a number of journals, magazines, and anthologies. She was awarded Honourable Mentions for her haiku in The Fifth Annual Peggy Willis Lyles Haiku Awards, 2017, and the 71st Basho Memorial English Haiku Contest, 2017, and for her tanka in UHTS “Fleeting Words” Tanka Contest 2017. She is listed on The European Top 100 haiku authors, 2017. https://marthamagenta.com/
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